The Odoriferous Paradigm

deceived and a broken-heart

Elusive is the illumination of crystal vision

Alluring is the eye of the blizzard’s mission

Where few rays shine thru silky lashes

Skewed by anguishing ice flakes bit by bit

Sorting the foolish plays with obliquity

Fervently suctioned into the dirty vacuum

Obtrusively lured towards conjured treasure

The mirror gawk talks off aim and charm

To target a mirage o’er Yankee lands

Where a voyage of promiscuous valor

Profoundly misleads ambiguous glands

Uncooked to the core is the guileful sprite

Quoting a King’s book by selfish right

Baited by the magician’s conspicuous game

Truth lay between the lines of malice proclaim

A good soul treading in one’s own isolation

Into the abyss of more perilous desolation

Tempting a placebo masking valid abuse

A brand earmarked by intended ruse

Lacking is self-honesty and wholeness 

A lone mother abandoned by a malicious knight

Licentious without heed or love’s prayer

She cries her aching heart unattended too

A scenic bride’s will is destined for sorrow! Registered & Protected

  1. #1 by Mary on June 10, 2011 - 8:36 am

    Awhhh Charlie Boy, that is sad to me 😦

    • #2 by charlie nitric on June 10, 2011 - 8:48 am

      Hi Mary –

      Yes it is very sad. It’s something I witnessed on MySpace a few years ago. The NYC guy was a sex therapist and was conning women by quoting Jesus. He especially used one lady in my friend’s list whom I used to chat with here and there. She used to talk to me about this guy. He was bad news and she bought it all; hook, line and sinker. Thank you for reading me and for commenting. 🙂

  2. #3 by bornstoryteller on June 10, 2011 - 8:43 am

    Oh … sweetness, sweetness, I was only joking
    When I said by rights you should be
    Bludgeoned in your bed

    Nicely written sirrah. liked, twitted, and other assorted haberdasheries.

    • #4 by charlie nitric on June 10, 2011 - 8:50 am

      Hi Stuart –

      Why thank you for your haberdasheries. I appreciate all of them and thank you for commenting as well. 🙂

  3. #5 by Corinne on June 10, 2011 - 8:53 am

    I read and sighed and said ‘How talented beeth this man who writeth in so many forms……;)

    • #6 by charlie nitric on June 10, 2011 - 9:23 am

      Good Morning Corinne –

      You’ve been away for a while and glad to see you back. You missed my funny story the other day called, “Butt out, Charlie!” Booo hahaha. Thank you for your kind words Corinne and thank you for reading me. 🙂

  4. #7 by kriti on June 10, 2011 - 2:10 pm

    That was way too good Charlie – I had to read it a few times. Liked it very very much. The sadness stays with you for a while …

    • #8 by charlie nitric on June 10, 2011 - 4:09 pm

      Hello Kriti –

      I think so too. My poem is a very sad poem and a deep one that will take a post to explain. Maybe I should do that sometime and repost the poem with the root behind my writing it. Gosh between your comments here and your stilettos there, I am seriously inspired ;)!!! Thank you for reading me and for commenting :).

  5. #9 by Roy Durham on June 10, 2011 - 4:14 pm

    very talented very good poem thank you for the posting of it god bless

    • #10 by charlie nitric on June 10, 2011 - 5:05 pm

      Hi Cowboy –

      Thanks for the compliment. God Bless you as well and thank you for reading me. 🙂

  6. #11 by Nelieta on June 10, 2011 - 4:26 pm

    Hi Charlie, the first time I read it , I didn´t understand it. So I took some quiet time and read it again. It is sad 😦

    • #12 by charlie nitric on June 10, 2011 - 5:24 pm

      Hello Nelieta –

      I usually don’t like to write in this style but will do so on occasion. Yes, it’s a very sad poem indeed. Thank you for reading me and for commenting. 🙂

  7. #13 by Jim Brandano on June 10, 2011 - 6:20 pm

    OKay, really sad and touching very nicely written, Charlie


    • #14 by charlie nitric on June 10, 2011 - 6:30 pm

      Hello Jim –

      I hadn’t read my poem for quite a while until earlier today and was moved inside of me as I remember witnessing this event on MySpace. Thank you for reading me and for commenting. 🙂

  8. #15 by InJensMind on June 10, 2011 - 11:20 pm

    T’was the eve of the weekend when I dropped by, to read the poem that made people cry.
    I scrolled down to comment ’bout say something smart but, my mind went blank from a massive brain fart.

    Yea seriously, I just lost the entire thing I was about to say. I will comeback and comment if it returns. 😀

    • #16 by charlie nitric on June 11, 2011 - 2:12 am

      Hi Jenni –

      Nice rhyme. I hope you remember at a later time, lol. Regardless though, thank you for reading me and for commenting. 🙂

  9. #17 by melissa on June 11, 2011 - 1:11 am

    I always come here for a good laugh…but this is another treat Brian. There’s always this side of you that’s unpredictable and new…Yeah, I guess you’re evolving — as a writer…You have a compassionate heart… so sorry to hear about the story behind the poem…

    • #18 by charlie nitric on June 11, 2011 - 2:16 am

      Hey Melissa –

      Oh I enjoy treats and unpredictable can be a good thing much of the time. I hope that my surprises are enjoyable for you here and I do think in some ways I will continue to evolve forever. Thank you for reading me and for commenting. 🙂

  10. #19 by Dangerous Linda on June 11, 2011 - 2:43 am

    good stretch into something different — well done!

    • #20 by charlie nitric on June 11, 2011 - 10:32 am

      Hey Linda –

      I’m a flexible guy. Didn’t you know that about me? LOL. Thank you for reading me and for commenting. 🙂

  11. #21 by rimly on June 11, 2011 - 6:27 am

    So sad Charlie….

    • #22 by charlie nitric on June 11, 2011 - 10:39 am

      Hi Rimly –

      Very sad poem, huh. Sometimes I don’t like to write sadness in my words but then again, sometimes the words come out without much thinking. They just flow so we must let them out. Thank you for reading me and for commenting. 🙂

  12. #23 by Jessica Mokrzycki on June 11, 2011 - 12:12 pm

    Wasn’t expecting this! So sad :(…but well written. It’s always a pleasure to stop by.

    • #24 by charlie nitric on June 11, 2011 - 12:34 pm

      Hello Jessica –

      Many people are commenting similar to you. Readers are not expecting this type of creative writing from me, lol. I’m sure you’ve realized I prefer simple and light-hearted humor writing but I can create poems like this one as well. I just prefer having more fun when I write. Thank you for reading me and for commenting. 🙂

  13. #25 by Mari Sterling Wilbur on June 12, 2011 - 10:30 pm

    Very, very creative and interesting. I enjoyed seeing something totally different from you. Job more than well done. I’d love to hear the background on this that you’ve alluded to.

    • #26 by charlie nitric on June 12, 2011 - 10:43 pm

      Hello Mari –

      A lot of people have mentioned to me from various groups, here, ect., that they didn’t realize I could write like this. I usually don’t write like this because it’s not a style for me that’s fun to write. And of course, it’s not a style that is understood by every one. Either way, I’m sure glad that you and many others appreciate and like it. That’s always excellent for me to hear. Thank you for reading me and for commenting. 🙂

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